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PostSubject: yeh raat hai suhani    Sat Jun 30, 2012 8:45 pm

yeh kahani meri original novel story MR.HALF se likha gaya hai sirf aap logo ke reviews janne ke



liye ..... jo ki meri khud ki creation hai .



raat ke 10 baje rahe hai .. delhi jaisi mahanagar ab dheere dheere sone ja rahi hai .. street



lighte jagah jagah jal rahi hai .. andhera par sabse jyada jo najar aata hai wo hai andhera,



sannata , par kuch aisi jagah bhi hai jaha rat ka matlab .. shabab aur kabab hota hai ... jaise



bear baar , kotha .... ityadi ... pahle jamane me kotho me ghunghru baza karte they par ab ...



anarkali ... disco chali bajta hai ....bear baar me bhi kuch aisa hi hota hai .. ache paise dene



par ap har tarah ki sukh suvidha mil sakti hai .. phir chahe wo mansik ho ya .......





raat ke karib 12:30 baje hasrat naam ke bear baar se 2 ladke bahar nikalte hai dono ki umra koi



khas nahi ... ek yahi koi 25 saal ka, kad 5 ft 6 inch rang gora wahi dusra thoda lamba tha ...



karib 6 ft .. rang gora acha khasa hast pusht sharir .. hatho me mahngi ghadi jsime 12 :30 ka



time baj raha tha ... pahne huye mehnge shirt jo kai jagah se aadhe khule huye they .. yeh wo hai



jinhone apni pahli mili tanqah ka bharpoor maza liya hai .. . sharab , shabab aur kabab yeh tino



jaha honge log apne apko rok nahi paate aur aise bear baar ... hi inka nirman karte hai ..

dono bharpoor nashe me hai .. gadi me chabhi lagate nahi ban rahi hai .. jaise taise chabhi



lagti hai ... aur phir gadi start ho jati hai .. aasman me chaye kali ghataye aur mand mand bahti



thandi hawa .. inke adhure hosh ko bhi apne agosh me lene ko dono pakke dost ab baat karte huye



apne ghar ja rahe hai ...



akhil - kya mast nachti hai wo .. hai na ... mera to dil aa gaya us par ...

nikhil ne akhil ki baat ka koi jawab nahi diya .. wo bas bike chala raha tha ... andhadhund ..



ghar pahuchne ki jaldi hai nikhil ko ....



akhil - yar mera to dil aa gaya hai us par .. ab to mai roj aya karunga ... apne jaan - e - bahar



se milne ... tu kya bolta hai nikhil



nikhil ab bhi chup hai .. par usi saans tez chal rahi hai ..



abey bolta kyu nahi hai nikhil ... kya hua tujhko



achanak nikhil ne gadi rok di aur ...



utar ja meri gadi se ...(nikhil ke shabdo me gussa saaf najar aa raha tha .. par ankho se ansu



bahar nikal rahe they)



bhai nikhil kya ho gaya hai tere ko .. ghar chal sab thik ho jayega .. (akhil ke chahre par



ascharya ke bhaav they )



maine kaha utar to matlab utar ...(nikhil ke shabdo me aaya gussa .. ab uske chahre par aa raha



tha .. jo usey aur bhi akrakamak bana rahe they )



bhai .. to tension mat le sab thik ho jayega .. chal ghar chal ... ( akhil ne nikhil ke kandhe



par hath rakh usey ashvasan dena chaha .. par nikhil ne hath jhatak us par baras pada ... apne



andar samete toofan ko baahar nikal diya ...



tu mere se dur rah .. tu mere ko apna dost kahta hai ... meri biwi aur bache mere raah dekh rahe



honge .. meri 7 saal ki bachi hai .. jo beemar hai wo papa .. papa karte ab to so bhi gai hogi ..



meri biwi ne ab tak apne muh me ann ka nival abhi nahi dala hoga .. aur mai tere jaise kameene



dost ke sath aaiyashi kar raha hu ... lanat hai mujhe tujh par ..



bhai tune jyada pi li hai .. bahut bahki bahki baante kar raha hai ghar chal sab thik ho jayega



... (akhir ne phir apni taraf se koshish ki nikhil ko shant karne ki .. par jab toofan nikalta



hai .. bina nuksaan kiye wapas nahi jata hai ... isey toofan ki aatma ko shanti milti hai .. usey



apne par garv hota hai .. ki ussey khatarnaak koi hai .. waisa hi toofan yaha bhi aya hai ..



nikhil ki jindagi me .. bagair nuksaan kiye yeh bhi nahi jayega)

(nikhil ne akhil ki baato ko kaat kar .. aage kaha)



bas akhil aaj se tere mera rishta khatam , tu apne raste aur mai apne raste .. tera aur mera koi



aur vaasta nahi hai ..



itna kah kar nikhil ne gadi start ki .. akhil ne bahut rokne ki koshish ki par nikhil nahi mana



to nahi mana .. uste dono ke bich hathapai ki naubat aa gai ...



akhil ne nikhil ka gala pakad liya wahi nikhil ke hath me akhil ki gardan .. dono apne taraf se



jor rahe they .. akhil chahta tha nikhil ruk jaye aur nikhil jana chahta tha ..



nikhil tu kyu nahi samjhta .. tu ruk kyu nahi raha .. tere jindagi khatre me hai ... (akhil ne



jaise taise apne shabdo ko pura kiya ,, par nikhil ne aage nahi bolne diya .. nikhil ne akhil par



jordaar ghuse se prahar kiya ... jisse akhil ka sar jhanna gaya ,,, usey apne sar me tez pida ke



uthne ka abhas hua aur w pida , dard itni jyada thi ki wo wahi behosh ho gaya)



(akhil ko behosh samajh kar nikhil waha se bahar nikalta hai .. apne gande kapdo ko jharkar saaf



karne ki koshish karta hai .. apni gadi ke paas jata hai .. usey uthata hai .. usey saaf karta



hai .. gadi me chabhi lagata hai .. start karta hai aur nikhil ko wahi chor kar wo aage nikal



jata hai ...)



aaj ke baad mai akhil se kabhi nahi milunga na hi ussey kabhi baat karunga (nikhil ne man hi man



dridh nishchay kar liya tha .. aur yeh dridh nischay uske ankho me bhi najar aa raha tha ...



tabhi uski ankho ko kuch bhi aur bhi najar aya)

( ek bahut hi khoobsurat ladki .. kad yahi koi 5 ft 5 inch .. lambi , charhari badan wali ,



aur bala ki khoobsurat .. aur aise kapde ki kisi ko bhi apna deewana bana de ..

wo ladki lift maang rahi thi ,. nikhil na jane kyu mana nahi kar paya aur apni gadi rok di ..



aasman me phaili kali ghataye ab jor se thandi hawa ko chala rahe they .. aisa lag raha tha ki



bas abhi barish ho jayegi ,.,



nikhil ko laga ki usne is ladki ko pahle bhi kahi dekha hai wo bhi 1 baar nahi kai baar ... par



kaha yeh yaad nahi aa raha tha .. apne manobhav par kabu rakh pana nikhil ke liye mushkil ho raha



tha par us ladki ko pata na chale isliye nikhil ne shuruwaat ki ,..



kaha jayengi madam ?



kahi bhi jaha ap chor de .. (ladki ne sapat lahje me jawab diya)



nikhil chauk gaya .. usey is tarah ke jawab ki katai umeed nahi thi .. us sakpaka gaya .. uske



man me khyal aane laga ki kahi yeh koi call girl to nahi .. usne tezi se kaha ..



sorry madam apne galat aadmi ko chuna hai .. mujhe ghar jana hai meri biwi mera int ... (shabd



pure bhi nahi kar paya ki ladki tezi se uchal kar .. uski bike par baith gai aur nikhil ko piche



se tezi se pakad liya ..



ghatnakram itni tezi se ghatit hua ki nikhil ko kuch pata hi nahi chala usne jaise taise apne



hosh sambjhale aur palat kar us ladki se kaha



dekhiye aap (iske pahle ki baat puri ho paati .. ladki ne uske hatho par apna haath rakh diya)



sshhhh kuch mat kahiye .. bahut romantic mausam hai .. bas ap gadi chalaiye aur mujhe is mausam



me kho jane digiye ..



par .. (nikhil ki baar phir adhuri rah gai ladki ne aage bola)



mai apse request karti hu .. plz ...



agar ladki pyar se bole to patthar bhi pighal jate hai .. phir insan kis khet ki muli hai ..

nikhil bhi man gaya .. usne ladki se kuch nahi kaha ..

nikhil ne gadi start ki aur aage chalne laga .. ladki ko boriyat na ho isliye nikhil ne baat



shuru ki ...



apka ghar kaha hai ?



jaha ap le jaye ( sapat jawab tha ,, nikhil niruttar ho gaya .. par phir pucha)



ap rahne wali kaha ki hai ? aap kaha rahti hai ?



apke dil me ( is baar jawab turant mila .. wo bhina kisi lag lapet ke .. ladki ne nikhil ko piche



se pakad kar uske pith par apna sar rakha hua tha .. nikhil ko yeh acha bhi lag raha tha aur ajib



bhi )



(nikhil ne himmat kar kae aage pucha )



apki hobbies kya hai ?



insano ka khoon pina ... ( jawab spasht tha .. par khatarnaak tha .. nikhil to pahle bahut tez se



chauka .. phir usey laga .. ki shayad ladki majar kar rahi hai usne aage kaha)



ap acha majak kar leti hai .. mohtarma



mai majak nahi karti ,... ( yeh jawab sun kar nikhil ka khoon sukh gaya .. aur rahi sahi kasar



apne pet par lipte ladki ke hath ne kar di ,... hath ke nakhoon bahut tezi se bade ho rahe they



.. aur bade hote hi sidhe uske pet me ghus gaye .. pet se pichkari ke tarah khoon ki chite bahar



nikli .. ladki ka mukh iske pahle nikhil ke gardan se touch ho pata ..



moti si bhari si ladki utdi hui aai aur aur usi chudai ladki se aake takra gai .. ladki dwara



utpan hua jhatka itna jabardast tha ki .. bike , nikhil aur ladki alag alag .. ja kar gire ..



ladki tezi se nagin ki tarah fuphkarti hui uthi ,,,



tu mera niwala chinne phir aa gaya mr. half .. tu hame chain se jeene kyu nahi deta ,,



kyoki maine aam logo ki raksha ka pran le rakha hai ..



tu galat hai mr. half bhooth ho kar tu insano ki madad kar raha hai .. arey hame to in par raaz



karna chahiye ,, yeh hamare aage kide makaude se jyada kuch nahi hai ,.,



jaban sambhal ladki .. nahi to mera gussa tere khoobsurat jism ko bhaap bana dega ( mr. half ab



gusse me tha .. aur gusse me hone par mr. half kuch bhi kar sakta tha )



ohho tera gussa hahahahaha .. chuhe ke gusse se bhala sherni ko kya pharak padega .. tu mera kuch



nahi nigad sakta aur mai tujhe dhool me mila sakti hu .. namuna dekhna chahta hai yeh dekh mai



isey abhi khatam kar deti hu ,..



ladki me gazab ka josh tha usne apne hath nikhil ki taraf kiya .. aur uske hath se ek tez rays



nikli aur sidhe .. nikhil ke achet pade shav se milne jane lagi ..



ab yeh turant gal jayega .. haddiya tak gal jayegi .. ( ladki ko yakeen tha ki nikhil mar jayega



.. mar samne jab mr. half ho to aise yakeen bhi mitte me mil jate hai ,, ladki ke hath se nikle



rays hil ke sharir se takrakar chitra gaye ,...



(ladki yeh sab dekh kar chauk gai .. usey yakeen nahi hua ,,)



yeh tune kaise kiya .. ?? jaha tak mai janti hu tujhe to shrap mila hai bhoot banne ka .. tere



paas itni takat nahi ho sakti hai .. ki mere mantrit waro ko tod sake



hamari pichli ladai me mere paas aisi takat nahi thi .. tab bhooto ke mahan gyani pandit shri



vedantnath ne meri jaan bachai thi .. unhone hi mujhe kuch jadu shaktiyan sikhai hai ,, aur ab



mai haar nahi manunga . tujhe jaan se maar dunga ...



mujhe maarne wale bahut aaye aur chale gaye .. par mai abhi bhi yahi hu .. parantu mujhe dukh us



buddhe ka hai .. wo saala bach gaya .. wo bhooto ke raaja ko yeh kah rakha hai ki insan ki madad



karni chahiye .. jabki wo hamare pairo ki dhool bhi nahi .. ab to pahle tu marega .. phir ..



vedantnath aur phir raza ... suptanath ..



jaban sambhal kar baat kar ladki .. tu mere raja ka apman kar rahi hai .. mai ab tujhe nahi



chorunga .. ( ladki dwara kahe gaye shabd ne mr. half ko krodhit kar diya .. aur krodh me aakar



usne ladki par .. chaistnag ka prahar kiya ,. mr. half ke hath se nikli urays se chaistnag ka



nirman kiya jisne ladki ko bandhak bana liya ,..



ahh .. tu is hathiyar ka prayog bhi kar sakta hai ,,, par mai pahle ki tarah kamjor nahi hu mai



isey pal bhar me tod sakti hu ( ladki ne thodi si takat lagai .. aur chaistnag tukdo me vibhajit



ho kar gayab ho gaya ..)



tune apna vaar kar liya ab mera kha aur apne aap ko bacha ke dikha ... ( ladki ne .. vayuendra



astra ka prayog jisse mr. half nahi bach paya .. ladki ke hath se nikle rays ne vayu ka ajjebo



garib dabav banaya jisse uska aadha uper ka sharir aage se piche ki ore hote huye niche mudne ki



wahi niche ka adha sharir niche se piche ki aur phir piche se upar ki ore ghumne ki chesta karne



lage ,..



aah yeh vayuendra astra mujhe tod kar rakh degi .. meri sari pasliya bahar nikalne ko betab ho



rahi hai .. mujhe is vayu daab se ajad hona hoga .. par iske liye mujhe dhyan lagana hoga ..



ha ha ha kyu kaisa laga ... mera vaar ..ab tu mar ke rahega .. ( ladki over confident hoti ja



rahi thi .. usey lagne laga tha ki mr. half marne lagega)





(mr. half apne apko dhyan me le gaya .. aur kuch se. baad apna hath khola hath se nikli rays ne



.. ladki ko jor dar jhatka diya .. jhatka itna jabardast tha ,, ki ladki ki cheekh nikal gai ..



aah .. yeh shaktipunj ka vaar tune kaise kiya .. yeh vaar to unhone apne beti yani mujhe bhi nahi



sikhaya hai ... ( shabdo me ascharya ke bhav .. aur chahre par pida ke bhav saaf dikh rahe they



.. )



yeh maine unse hi sikha hai par unhone mujhe nahi sikhaya hai .. maine unhe is astra ka proyog



karte dekha ... wo practice kar rahe they aur maine chuph ke dekha ,, aur aaj maine iska pahli



baar prayog kiya .. aur yeh kaam kar gaya ..



aah .. mai bhale hi ghayal ho gai hu par mai hari nahi hu .. mai abhi to ja rahi hu .. aah .. par



mai yeh janti hu ki maha mantrit asthangchidrashtra maha mund kapal kaha hai ,.. tu isi ko dhundh



raha hai .. kyoki yeh kapal tujhe shrap se mukt kar sakta hai .. aah .. par yeh tujhe kabhi nahi



milega .. aah .. kabhi nahi ..



itna kah kar wo ladki gayab ho gai aisa laga jaise waha koi ho hi na.. aur mr. half wahi khada ..



thaga sa rah gaya .. ab wo kuch nahi kar sakta hai ..



aah ,, maine badi mehnat se iska pata lagaya .. iske piche laga raha taki isey ghayal kar us maha



mantri kapal tak pahuch saku .. par ab wo jaan gai hai .. ab wo mujhe waha ka pata nahi batayegi



.. ab mujhe phir se shuru se shuru se shuru karna hoga ..



par pahle mujhe apne dost nikhil ko hospital pahuchana hoga .. mere plan me bechara bematlab ka



fas gaya ..



(mr. half ne .. nikhil ko dono hatho se uthaya .. aur turant gayab hone laga .. par gayab nahi ho



paya .. tabhi usey yaad aya ki ..



mere hatho ek begunah insan ki jaan khatre me padi hai isliye meri dwara seekhi gai vidya me se



ek vidya lupt ho gai hai .. par mujhe iski chinta nahi hai .. mujhe chinta nikhil ki hai .. isey



kaise pahchau ..



arey ha yeh gaadi kaam me aa sakti hai .. mr. half gadi ko uthata hai .. us par baith kar gadi



start karta hai aur apne sine se nikhil ko chipka kar .. hospital le jane lagta hai ,. is umeed



me ki shayad .. nikhil bach jayega ..)



to be continued ...



yeh mere dwara likhe gaye novel story .. mr. half ka scene hai .. jo is story ke madhya se liya



gaya hai ... kripya karke apne bahumulya sujhav avashya de ..
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