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PostSubject: Short stories   Sat Jun 23, 2012 11:10 am

Yha mai apni likhi short stories post karunga.aasha hai aap logo ko pasand aayega.
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PostSubject: nagraj vs kobi   Sat Jun 23, 2012 11:12 am

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(jungle ka drisya jha ek dusre k aamne samne khade hai kobi aur nagraj)

nagraj-bahut sun rakha hai tere bare me. Junglevasiyo ka jeena haram kar diya hai tune. Jabardasti devta bnna chahta hai jungliyo ka. Aaj ye nagsmarat nagraj tujhe btayega ki tu kya kahlane layak hai.

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(nagraj kobi par visfunkar fenkta hai)

nagraj-fuuu

(kobi par visfunkar ka jyada asar nhi hota)

kobi(man me)-lo jen kahti thi ki mere munh se badbu aati hai agar vah ye gandh sunghti to yhi behosh ho jati.
Kobi(nagraj se)-abe band kar apni sadi badbu.datun karta hai ki nhi. Kitni gandi badbu hai teri chhi chhi.ja jakar pahle datun kar k aa.

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(nagraj ab danv badlta hai aur kobi ko sammohit karne ki koshish karta hai)

nagraj(sammohan kirne fenkte huye)- dhekho in aankho ko, guar se dhekho. Ab tum mere gulam ho. Tum whi karoge jo mai chahunga. Jao sabhi jungliyo se mafi mango.

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(kobi nagraj k chehre par ghunsa marta hai jisse nagraj ko chakkar aa jata hai)

kobi-abe teri aankhe neeli hai to kya mai tera gulam ho gya.mujhe mafi mangne ko bolta hai.
Teri aankhe noch k fenk dunga.

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(nagraj samajh jata hai ki do prajatiyo(insan aur bhedia) k milan k karan kobi par uski shaktiya kuch khas asar nhi kar rhi aur vah kobi par nag chodta hai)

nagraj(man me)-meri shaktiya ispar asar nhi kar rhi par mere nag jarur ise bandh lenge.

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(kobi nag bandhno me jakda jata hai wo usse chhutne ki koshish karta hai par dubara nag bandhno me jakda jata hai.)

kobi-kambhakht k nag bi gond ki bhanti chipku hai ek bar chipak jane k bad hatne ka nam hi nhi le rhe.

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(kobi ko fuzo baba jdi-buti iktha karte dhikhayi dete hai.ab kobi to thahra kobi. waqt padne par gadhe ko bi bap bna le ye to fir bi fuzo the)

kobi- fuzo baba apne bache ko bchaiye warne ye sanp mujhe dusri duniya me pahucha denge. Sawal-jawab me waqt jaya na kare.

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(fuzo jisne abhi tak nagraj ko nhi dhekha tha kobi ko pakshiyo ki madad se aajad karwa deta hai.)

kobi-dhaywad baba(kambhakh budhe-thude k karan bach gya aaj to)

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(fuzo chala gya tha aur kobi aur nagraj wha rah gye the.)
kobi-dhekha meri takat. Tune bhut apni takat dhikha di ab meri bi takat dhekh le.

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(kobi nagraj se bat kar rha hota hai aur sath hi bhedia fauz ko bulata hai)

kobi-ab dhekh meri bhediya fauz tera kya hal karti hai.

CHALE AAO CHALE AAO MERI BHEDIA FAUZ K NAMAKHARAM SIPAHIYO

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(agle hi pal charo taraf se bhediye aa jate hai)

kobi(bhediyo se)-nagraj ki teeka-boti ek kar dalo.

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(sabhi bhediye nagraj par tut padte hai aur unme se ek do nagraj ko kat kar galne lagte hai kobi ye dhekhkar hairan ho jata hai)

kobi(man me)-bap re gye to the mere bhediye iski teeka-boti karne par bhediye to ise katte hi gal ja rhe hai. Khi isne mujhe kat liya aur mai gal gya to jen ka nhi nhi masaba ka kya hoga jen to bhedia k sath matargasti me lgi rahegi.use fark nhi pdega par masaba ko jhula kaun jhulayega. Mere bap ka kya jata hai iski bat manne me ye thode na hmesha yha rahega. Jab yha se chala jayega to wapas apni kobigiri dhikhaunga. Wah kya bat aayi hai mere bheje me. aakhir bhedia jo hu.

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(kobi nagraj ki chaploosi karta hai)

kobi-hari khal wale bhaiya ji mujhe aapki bat samajh aa gyi. Mai thahra budhu, khopdi me bat jaldi se gusti nhi.bacha ye nadan hai.ab mafi bi de do.

(aur nagraj kobi ko maf kar deta hai.)

nagraj- theek hai. Par aainda hekdi mat dhikhana.

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PostSubject: Re: Short stories   Sat Jun 23, 2012 3:24 pm

Razz Razz Razz lol! lol! lol! lol! maza aa gaya padh kar rabbit rabbit
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PostSubject: Re: Short stories   Mon Jun 25, 2012 12:45 pm

थैँक्यू भाई जल्दी ही और भी लगाऊँगा
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PostSubject: Re: Short stories   Mon Jun 25, 2012 12:47 pm

Mujhe bhi bahut maza aaya lol! lol! Aur Lagaiye lol! lol! Very Happy Very Happy

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PostSubject: Re: Short stories   Thu Jun 28, 2012 2:15 pm

Achh khaani thi ... Smile
aur majedaar likho bhai.

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PostSubject: Re: Short stories   Thu Jun 28, 2012 2:25 pm

AATANK
Delhi-aajkal shehar me ek agayat hatyare ka dar sabhi parshid hastiyo me faila hua hai.na to prashashn aur na tiranga hi us hatyare ko abhi tak khoj paye hai.shehar k kai prasid hastiya mari ja chuki hai.ab hatyare ne prshashn aur tiranga ko challange kiya hai ki vah jaldi hi satyprakash ko apna nishana bnayega.5feb ko court me.satyprakash ek bahut hi kabil aur nyaypriya vakil the.
Satyprakash ki suraksha me police force lga di gyi.khud abhay(tiranga) bi chaukanna tha.court me jane wale har aadmi ki cheking ki ja rhi thi.ek nakhun katne wale aaujar ko bi court me nhi le jane diya gya.kuch der bad court me behas chhid gyi.satyaprakash raghu dada k khilaf case lad rha tha jisne 10katl kiye the.jankari k anusar raghu dada k dushmano par hi hamle huye the aur satyaprakash bi raghu dada ka dushman tha.satyaprakash ye case jitne ki halat me tha ki court me ek halki aawaj gunji.jaise koi camera khichte waqt hota hai aur agle hi pal ek goli satyaprakash ko nishana bnane chal pdi.par abhay chaukna tha aur usne satyprakash ko bacha liya par fir bi goli ne satyaprakash ko apna shikar bna liya tha.goli unki bah me lgi thi.goli chalne k karan court me hangama macha hua tha aur sare aadmi bhag gye.hamlavar bi is bhagdhad ka fayda uthakar bhag gya tha.kuch der me abhay tiranga bankar wapas aaya aur securityguard se puchhne lga ki hamlavar andar hathiyar kaise le gya.
Security guard-hme nhi malum tiranga court shuru hone se pahle hamne jagah jagah ki talashi li thi aur court me jane wale har aadmi ki bi cheking ki gyi yha tak ki koi ek suyi bi bhitar nhi le gya tha samajh me nhi aata aakhir hamlavar ne goli chalayi kha se.tiranga unse puchtachh jari rakhta hai.
Tiranga-kaun kaun gya tha andar aur jiske pas jo bi tha mujhe uski detail chahiye.
Securityguards-list to mil jayegi par kya le gye the ye ham bta nhi payenge.waise harek k pas mobile aur kuch jaruri kagjat the.ha ek k pas camera bi tha.
Tiranga-camera?kiske pas tha camera?
Securityguard-koi jaggu dada ki premika thi simran uske pas tha.
Tiranga-mujhe uska address chahiye.
Aur tiranga simran ka address securityguard se lekar simran par nazar rakhne lga.idhar satyaprakash ji ki janch ki ja rhi thi.unke hath me se goli nikali ja chuki thi.goli ek chharre jaisi thi.bahut hi choti aur patli.jaise bachho k banduk ki goli hoti hai us type ki.ye jankari bi tiranga ko milti hai aur use pakka vishwas ho jata hai ki hamlavar simran hi hai par use kuch aur bi sabut ki talash the.jaldi hi ek aur khabar akhbar me faili ki agyat hatyare ka agla shikar highcourt ka jaj hoga jo raghu dada ka case handil kar rha hai. Jaj dar jata hai aur wah raghu dada k khilaf action nhi lena chahta par tiranga jaj ko bharosha dilata hai ki use kuch nhi hoga idhar abhay ne satyapraksh se kahkar chutti le li thi.aur tiranga bankar wapas court me maujud tha aur simran par nazar rakh rha tha.satyaprakash k dalilo se jaj raghu dada k virudh faisla sunane hi wala tha ki simran ne apna camera nikala aur use click karne k liye hath lgaya.tiranga ye dhekh rha tha aur wah turant hi simran k hatho se camera khich liya.simran hairan rah gyi aur wah wha se bhagne lgi par tiranga se bachkar bhag na ski.tiranga ne use pakad liya.
Tiranga-bahut khun kar chuki ho tum ab aur nhi.
Simran-kya sabut hai tumhare pas ki khun maine kiye hai?
Tiranga-tumhara ye camera.iski janch se pta chal jayega.
Simran ye sunte hi samajh jati hai ki uska khel khatam ho gya.aur use bi pakad kar jail me dal diya jata hai.
Par kahani abhi smapt nhi huyi.asli hamlavar bacha hua tha.
Asli hamlavar -hahaha mere raste ka roda hat gya.hahaha kanun bi mera kuch bigad nhi payega kyuki ab hamlavar simran ko man liya gya hai jab mujhe pta chala ki tiranga simran ko hamlavar samajh rha hai to maine simran k chote bhai piyush ko kaid kar liya aur use dhamki di ki agar vah mera kahna nhi mani to piyush mara jayega.apne bhai ko bachane k liye usne mera kahna man liya.maine uske camera me gun fit kar diya.hahaha.ab mai aajad hu.
Tiranga-apradh karke koi apradhi aajad rahe,fir kya kam kanun ka aur tiranga ka.
Hamlavar-tiranga tu... tu yha kaise?
Tiranga-tune apni taraf se to bharshak koshish ki ki tu bach jaye par aisa nhi hua.us camere me fit gun ki goli waisi nhi thi jaisi baki katl k waqt ki gyi thi.ye jankar mai simran k pas dubara gya aur usse pucha ki is bar usne alag goli kyu chalayi par usne kuch nhi bola par mere jyada dabav dene par usne btaya ki vah asli hamlavar nhi hai balki tere kahne par bni hai yani raghu k soutaile bhai manoj k kahne par.yha par aakar maine tere ghar ki talashi li aur mujhe pta chala ki tu ek engeeniar hai aur tu ek aisa mobile bna rha tha jisme gun fit ho.fir maine tere mobile ki talashi li aur wha camere ki jagah gun fit thi. aur isi ki sahayta se tune sabhi murder kiye.ab tujhe tere kiye gunaho ki saza milegi aur sabut mobile k rup me maujud hai hi.
Manoj-simran ne dhokha kiya ab piyush jinda nhi bachega.
Tiranga-piyush aazad hai.lo police bi pahuch gyi yha.
Iske bad simran aur radhu dada azad ho gye.
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PostSubject: Re: Short stories   Thu Jun 28, 2012 9:14 pm

Barhiya Kahani likhi hai aman bhai........ Very Happy Very Happy

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