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PostSubject: chakravyuh    Sat Jun 23, 2012 3:26 pm

story written in 13 may 2004


ramesh modi apni 15th vi salgirah par apni patni sodhu modi aur unki beti ritu modi ko gift deta hai. unki beti ritu modi jaise hi gift kholti hai waise hi usey ek gudiya milti hai jo thik uske mummy ki shakal se milti hai . usey samajh me nahi aata ki wey khele ki rakhe tabhi usey gudiya ke bagal me char sui milti hai , usey abhi bhi samajh me nahi aata hai tabhi usne ek sui us gudia ke mathe par sui bhok deti hai tabhi uski maa ki ek cheekh nikli aur fir wo mar gai.kuch der me unke papa ghar me pravesh karte hai phir wo chori chipe apni patni ko mara dekh kar bahut khush hua aur apni patni ka gift khola to usey abhi apni beti ke tarah ki gudia mili usne sui ghopne ki koshish ki tabhi uski beti ne gudia gira diya aur gudia ko dekhi uski shakal ki ek gudia dikhi to samajh gai , uska pita phone kiya police ko , police ko bulaya , police aai to uske pitane jhuthi kahani bata di aur apni beti ko chor bana diya beti apne kamre me gai aur gudia le aai aur gudia ko fhad di jaise hi gudiya ke 2 phad huye waise hi uske maa ke bhi 2 bhag ho gaye aur uski beti ko 10 saal ki saza ho gai aur jail chali gai , jail me khana to milta tha par pyar nahi milta tha.
dhire dhire 3 saal bite usne apne pita par bahut grinah ho rahi thi , usey apne pita se badla lena tha dheere dheere 3 saal aur bite ab to sirf 4 saal bache hai us jail me uska ek mitra ban gaya tha, us mitra ka naam havaldar joga singh tha , wah ladki ka sukh dukh batne laga tha , dheere dheere 3 saal aur bite aur is tarah matra 1 saal bas bache they aur usey apne pita se badla bhi lena tha isliye usey apne pita se badla bhi lena tha isliye usne hawaldal ko dost banaya taki taki jarurat padne par uske kaam aa sake par hawaldar dost to bana magar kaam na aa saka akhir vardi jo pahni thi isliye usey laga ki akele hi apne pita se badla lena padega . dheere dheere 1 din bacha aur ek din bachne se uski ankhe laal ho gai akhir badla jo lena tha , akhir wo din aa gaya jail se azad hone ka aur apne pita se badla lene ka aur 1 baje dophar ko wo azad ho gai ab usey madad chahiye aur madad ke liye usey ek inspector joga pandey mil gaya tha , ritu ka pita 10 saal tak khub aish kiya ab pata nahi kaise aish karega maut jo aane wali hai
inspector joga pandey apne 3 sipahiyo ke sath ramesh modi ke ghar chapa marta hai uske ghar me usi se pucha to bataya ki "sara kiya karaya mera hai maine hi wo gudia ek tantrik ojha se liya aur usne kaha ki jaise jaise sui ghosoge waise waise admi kamjor hota jayega aur akhiri sui ghoste hi woh mar jayega" is baat par mai khush ho gaya aur maine gudia le liya aur mai ab apna jurm kabul karta hu aap jo chahe saza de mujhe manjur hai inspector ne ramesh modi ko pakad liya aur tantrik ke paas pahucha tantrik bhagne laga to police ke hatho mara gaya ramesh modi ke hath me hathkadi laga kar caar me le ja rahe they court ke thik darwaje ke samne inspector joga pandey ki caar ruki court me ghuste hi karwai shuru ho gai ek kathghare me ramesh modi aur dusre kathghare me uski beti ritu modi thi. adalat ki karwai ke baad ramesh modi ko azad kar diya gaya tabhi ritu modi ne banduk nikala aur apne baap ko shoot kar diya
jo kaam adalat nahi kar saki wo kaam ek ladki ne kar dikhaya ek gunahgaar ko saza di aur nyaye ka kaam kiya parantu ritu ko fansi ki saza de di gai.
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PostSubject: Re: chakravyuh    Sat Jun 23, 2012 11:42 pm

Waah barhiya story likhi hai aapne ankur bhai Very Happy Very Happy
Dil khush ho gya Very Happy

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PostSubject: Re: chakravyuh    Sun Jun 24, 2012 1:26 am

Ankur bhai aapko dubra form mein dekhkar achcha laga...badhiya likha hai
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PostSubject: Re: chakravyuh    Sun Jun 24, 2012 4:39 pm

thank u .... youdhveer ji & shubham ji ... waise agar ap logo ne dhyan se dekha hoga to yeh story year 2004 me likhi tha .. matlab aaj se 8 saal pahle ... Very Happy
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PostSubject: Re: chakravyuh    Sun Jun 24, 2012 7:51 pm

Yani ki tab aap sirf 12 saal ke the Smile Smile Smile Smile

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PostSubject: Re: chakravyuh    Sun Jun 24, 2012 8:59 pm

Shubham Kulshreshtha wrote:
Yani ki tab aap sirf 12 saal ke the Smile Smile Smile Smile
ha ji tab mai mahaj 12 saal ka tha .. aye isi story se meri story jagat me entry hui ,,, Razz
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PostSubject: Re: chakravyuh    Thu Jun 28, 2012 2:21 pm

12 saal k hisab se theek he ! itni kam umr se hi khoon kharaaba pasand tha aapko ! Very Happy Very Happy

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